Entangled Sentence #1

In a recent editorial headlined, "Judge not, unless ye be qualified," The Birmingham News ran a sentence that I just cannot help judging. Although the editorial made a good point (There should be minimum qualifications for judges in Alabama.), I'd like to suggest improvements to the following sentence:

Overwhelming House approval on several bills this session, for example, one that would ban transfers of campaign contributions among political action committees, has not moved the Senate to action.

I read this sentence several times before I could digest its meaning easily. It is correct to set off a phrase like "for example" with commas, but when "for example" is part of a longer phrase that interrupts the main idea and is also set off by commas, things get confusing. There is a definite need for additional punctuation or a change of wording to make the point stand out.

By the time I reached "has not moved...," I'd forgotten what hadn't moved. In case you are wondering, it was the "overwhelming house approval on several bills" way back at the beginning.

I came up with a few suggestions. See which one you prefer and if you agree that it is clearer than the original.

SUGGESTION A: Overwhelming House approval on several bills this session--for example, one that would ban transfers of campaign contributions among political action committees--has not moved the Senate to action.

SUGGESTION B: Overwhelming House approval on several bills this session, including one that would ban transfers of campaign contributions among political action committees, has not moved the Senate to action.

SUGGESTION C: The House has overwhelmingly approved several bills this session, including one that would ban transfers of campaign contributions among political action committees, but so far, the Senate has not moved to act on any of them.

I'd love to hear your e-mail responses on this one. Stay tuned for more entangled sentences and suggested solutions in coming weeks.