We have all written confusing sentences, but even when we know there is a problem, it is not always easy to figure out the best fix. Here is a good example from a recent story in The Birmingham News:
Lawyers for Siegelman and Scrushy have raised nine issues in their filings to the court they believe merit a reversal in the case.
The phrase "in their filings to the court" sits in the middle of the sentence, clogging meaning. In this case, the fix is simple. Just turn "in their filings to the court" into an introductory phrase, and the sentence is much clearer:
In their filings to the court, lawyers for Siegelman and Scrushy have raised nine issues they believe merit a reversal in the case.
The fix is not always this easy, but it certainly works here!
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